I really enjoyed writing this paper because dance has been something I've been passionate about since I was young. However, this type of essay I wrote I was unfamiliar with. I have been asked in the past to either form an opinion or use evidence to back up a point, but not analyze and connect all of my texts together. I was surprised on how quickly I was able to pick up on this kind of writing and thinking because I had never done it before. It was also helpful being able to choose what I got to write about. I've learned a whole different kind of writing style and that I'm now comfortable being able to make analytic claims instead of just a report. I feel that with this paper in particular I felt much more confident and knowledgeable in what I was saying to my readers compared to past papers because either I didn't understand the assignment or I wasn't passionate or very knowledgeable of what my point was.
In my research essay, I felt that all my paragraphs were really strong and thought out. However, compared to my essay on Ferguson, I feel that I could have provided more evidence or examples to drive home my point and worked more on my transitions
Image excerpt: "As an audience member, the image of what they see may not as be complex as to the ballerina. Depending on the viewer and how many ballets they have been to, the opinions may vary. However, no one will answer that a ballerina is overweight, uncoordinated, or even unattractive. On the Washington Ballet’s website, the section Ballet 101, is a picture of a girl in a simple black leotard, pink tight, pointe shoes, in the classical attitude position. The website further talks about the most popular or must see ballets, followed by some information about dance positions and about audience etiquette. This specific example is catering towards the needs of either regular attendees of the ballet or the first timer. It was very thorough in the descriptions and also interesting to see how the company marketed to the audience members. The rhetors in this piece could have been either the artistic director or another employee who created the website, with the audience in mind of a person with some association with the ballet, whether it be a member of the company or someone who regularly attends. This also portrays the perfect ballerina or dancer that people look for in an either classical ballet or a more modern repertoire."
Compared to Ferguson excerpt: "As a rhetor, Johnson was very professional and spoke well regarding his recent promotion. He wore his uniform, which gave him credibility as a leader and officer. He also had to have a better knowledge of the direct and implied audiences. For example, the constant clicking of cameras and multiple microphones give way to the knowledge of the direct audience; the press and local news. The implied audience however, is much larger and diverse. On YouTube, this clip has about 6,600 views, this conference can be viewed by anyone. Just by viewing this short clip, one would not knowing very much about his background and without doing further research. However, he does a good job establishing credibility with his audiences."
Not only do I feel that my research essay paragraphs are much more thought out and not only stating facts, the final product took seven pages and seven sources instead of only three pages and three sources for my Ferguson essay. It was also really helpful having the ability with my professor and my fellow classmates to help further my writing skills and polish my arguments. I could get multiple critiques from people and be able to consider their ideas. I really think that these essays have made my writing much better and I now have a different skill set in analytic writing that I can bring to future essays.
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